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Poem: Painted Garden

by shiori_makiba

72 lines (412 words)

Part of the Berettaflies thread of the Polychrome Heroics by [personal profile] ysabetwordsmith.

Inspired by a prompt given by [personal profile] ysabetwordsmith for the March 2016 Thank Muse It's Friday session.

Painted Garden”

Priya and Ynez were painting murals of flowers

on the outside of their rental house.

They had permission from the landlord.

And they weren't the only ones in the city

who were painting flowers instead planting them.

To protect the citizens of Easy City

from the Berettaflies,

most of the city's daytime insect attractors

had to be removed.

It was practical and necessary

but that didn't make the sudden empty pots

and disturbed soil where cheerful flowers once lived

any less depressing.

The moonlight gardens helped.

It was nice to see something alive

in those barren spots

but it wasn't enough.

Moonlight gardens were most interesting

in the evening or during the night.

Not always hours that people could or did enjoy.

It was a problem.

Garden had never exactly been Priya's thing.

She thought plants were beautiful and

she admired well-made gardens.

But her immune system hated pollen

with the fury of a thousand sneezes.

And it seemed the sweeter smelling the flower,

the worse her eyes itched and her nose ran.

Many night-blossom plants smelled very sweet,

almost cloyingly sweet.

And sure enough, as dusk fall over Easy City

and the night air filled with flowery perfume,

she was transformed into sneezing, coughing, eye-watering

ball of misery until the medicine kicked in.

There was no way she was putting

that stuff in front of her place.

And Priya knew that she wasn't

the only allergy-sufferer

making that executive decision.

Her landlord was one of them.

People debated over what to do

about the depressing lack of daytime color

until someone suggested murals.

Businesses and private homes were

now applying paintbrush to ceramic,

brick, stone, and glass.

Some of them were better at it than others

but even the most amateur of these efforts

was damn sight better than nothing.

Priya and Ynez were given carte blanch

by the landlord to paint whatever

flower murals they wanted.

Ynez had hauled out a

book on flower symbolism

to help them pick.

White heather for protection.

Forget-me-nots for remembrance.

Cowslip for healing.

Eramurus for endurance.

And Euphorbia for persistence.

They also painted flowers to represent themselves.

Hibiscus for Priya.

Irises for Tsubasa.

Magnolias for Ynez.

They added a rhododendron wreathed in red roses

for Ashley and Haruko.

They weren't sure what to use for the other two,

Facet and Adalina, that Tsubasa had mentioned.

So they left space open for later.

They were covered in paint

but both agreed that

their garden was lovely.


The symbolism comes from floriography or the language of flowers.

The Flowers:

White Heather





Hibiscus are symbolic of consumed by love and delicate beauty.

Irises are symbolic of faith, wisdom, promise in love, hope, and valor.

Magnolias are symbolic of nobility and perseverance.

Rhododendron means danger, beware, I am Dangerous. Appropriate for Ashley, isn't it?

Red Roses can mean love, I love you, respect, and beauty. They were thinking of the respect meaning for Haruko as well as his adoptive grandfather's hybrid roses.


Date: 2016-03-20 01:50 pm (UTC)
siliconshaman: black cat against the moon (Default)
From: [personal profile] siliconshaman
Rhododenrons are also a rather 'gothy' plant... they were used a lot in Victorian era planting and created dark tunnels ideal for a gothic heroine to wander through.

So yes, a very good choice for Ashley in combination with the message.

The use of murals and artificial flowers is an excellent idea. Aside from anything else, it shades the soil and suppresses any weeds that might otherwise take root.

Date: 2016-03-20 06:14 pm (UTC)
thnidu: my familiar. "Beanie Baby" -type dragon, red with white wings (Default)
From: [personal profile] thnidu
I like it!

Date: 2016-08-12 04:48 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile]
I love it! Home-made murals are a bit of a family tradition, so it's nice to see someone else having similar ideas.

Just some nitpicking: >>Some of them were better at than others<< Might be a US thing, but i'd suggest adding an 'it' or 'this' after the 'at', or cutting the 'at' altogether.

Also, pretty sure it's Haruko adopted 'grand'father who made roses.


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